21.10.16 - English Homework!
For homework over over the holidays, we would like you write a diary entry in the role of Guy Fawkes! Check the iTunes U course for more details!
We we look forward to reading your super writing!
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21.10.16 - English Homework!As part of our Crime and Punishment theme, we have completed work all about Guy Fawkes and The Gunpowder Plot.
For homework over over the holidays, we would like you write a diary entry in the role of Guy Fawkes! Check the iTunes U course for more details! We we look forward to reading your super writing!
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Hassan
23/10/2016 09:54:19 am
5 November 1605
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Miss Waldron
24/10/2016 08:20:24 pm
A good start Hassan! 🙂
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Khadijah
29/10/2016 04:27:58 pm
It doesn't make sense when it says and the at stinking James
Khadijah
29/10/2016 04:51:58 pm
zakiyudeen
18/1/2017 05:16:16 pm
HI MISS waldron its me zakiyudeen ur old pupil from 2016 ive just come to ask how are u doing and to say that secondary school is going well.in all the sts im in set`1 and i have probably got the skills in all lessons from your education you and miss mcaffrey have taught me.Good kuck and bye.
Zahraa
23/10/2016 10:43:47 am
Ahhhhh! I'm going to be hung and quartered! James said he won't just let me die on my own if I confront who were my helpers and I answered with this: "you are out of your mind I am never going to tell you who were my mates and who helped me out!" Then he smirked and crackled like a witch: "fine then. We will see if you keep to your little bet not to tell on your mates....... think wisely! Well that was completely freaky! Know what am I supposed to do know?
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Miss Waldron
24/10/2016 08:21:26 pm
A good start to your diary entry Zahraa! 🙂
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Khadijah
29/10/2016 04:57:07 pm
Put it in speech marks .
Zahraa
23/10/2016 10:46:38 am
I can't believe of all the people queen Elizabeth I decided to put James ruling England! At first everyone was happy because his mom was a catholic so they thought he will put the Church of England and destroy it, but no! He was Church of England so people had a real disappointment then! Most people decided to go for Church of England since they knew James will just force them to follow Church of England but others decided to stay catholic!
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:27:52 pm
Good so far Zahraa but you can write much more than this?
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Fatima Patel
31/10/2016 08:42:08 pm
Yeah miss, I agree
Naeemah
25/10/2016 02:30:12 pm
5th November 1605
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:29:04 pm
Great so far Naeemah! 😊
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Zainab
26/10/2016 12:40:04 pm
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:30:49 pm
Good so far Zainab! Add some more!
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Zainab
30/10/2016 04:01:21 pm
Thank you miss I have edit and improved and added a new diary entry. Sorry I can change this by adding more ap sentences and I should of made my last sentence with a ! EXPLENATION MARK . Thanks
Naeemah
26/10/2016 06:11:07 pm
16 October 1605
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:29:51 pm
I like the way you have added another entry! 😊
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Aysha
27/10/2016 09:35:41 pm
Days have passed since I have seen light I have been in this dull prison cell for nearly 2 months now and I might not survive, I have not told the guards were the other men are. I might die today.
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:31:21 pm
Add some more Aysha!!
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Qasim
29/10/2016 03:40:15 pm
Dear Diary,
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:31:57 pm
Good Qasim! Add some more detail! How is he feeling?
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Qasim
31/10/2016 02:12:15 pm
Inside this massive parliament no one will try to get me, today is my day to blow up the parliament and distory King James life, with many of his other friends.
Fatima Patel
29/10/2016 04:57:18 pm
Dear dairy,
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:32:48 pm
Well tried with your entry Fatima!
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Khadijah
29/10/2016 04:57:30 pm
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Miss Waldron
30/10/2016 07:18:06 pm
Good so far Khadijah but it needs a bit more? Remember to tell the reader how Guy is feeling throughout the entry.
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Daniyah
29/10/2016 05:14:08 pm
3rd November 1605
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:33:36 pm
Wow! Super Daniyah! 😊
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Zainab
30/10/2016 03:57:05 pm
Daniyah can add more AP Sentences for her edit and improve.
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Miss Waldron
30/10/2016 08:33:03 pm
I agree Zainab! What do you think Daniyah? 🙂
Zainab
30/10/2016 09:03:27 pm
Thank you miss I also agree
Daniyah
31/10/2016 02:24:29 pm
I agree!
Daniyah
1/11/2016 08:59:19 am
The damp, stinking, tunnel was as dirty as the sewers.
Fatima P
28/1/2017 10:47:59 am
Wow you did soooo much.
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Gracia
29/10/2016 06:17:50 pm
How long does the diary entry have to be?
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Miss Waldron
29/10/2016 09:34:05 pm
I think you could write a similar amount to Daniyah!
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Haleema Hussain
30/10/2016 01:21:56 pm
3rd November 1605
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Miss Waldron
30/10/2016 07:21:35 pm
Some good details about the event included Haleema!
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Zainab
30/10/2016 07:49:37 pm
She has missed the last part of her speech .
Shazia
31/10/2016 07:58:52 am
She hasn't moved onto another line for new speaker new line .
Amrah
30/10/2016 08:09:02 pm
November 5th 1605
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Miss Waldron
30/10/2016 08:27:32 pm
Wow Amrah! Fantastic diary entry! Well done! 🙂
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Miss Waldron
30/10/2016 08:25:51 pm
Zainab - can you find what else she has missed?
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Zainab
31/10/2016 07:46:57 am
Hellema has missed full stops and need to improve by adding AP Sentences however the rest of her diary is fine ...
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Amrah
30/10/2016 08:55:37 pm
I kept on tossing from side to side, I could hear thudding footsteps, I couldn't stop dreaming.
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Zainab
30/10/2016 08:56:00 pm
Hellema has not added AP Sentences . It also does not make sense . She also needs to add full stops . Thanks
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Amrah
30/10/2016 09:02:19 pm
Dear diary, it has been an exhausting last few weeks and I don't know how to
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Shazia
30/10/2016 10:29:51 pm
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Miss Waldron
31/10/2016 07:31:24 pm
A good start Shazia!
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Zainab
31/10/2016 08:21:02 pm
I think she needs to add AP Sentences... THANKS
Shazia
1/11/2016 08:21:21 am
I think more AP sentences .
Shazia
1/11/2016 08:48:54 am
I need to make sure it makes sense.
Gracia
30/10/2016 10:49:43 pm
To whom it may concern,
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Miss Waldron
31/10/2016 07:32:42 pm
Wow Gracia! Amazing writing! 🙂
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Gracia
30/10/2016 10:50:35 pm
Guy Fawkes Diary
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Miss Waldron
31/10/2016 07:33:10 pm
👍🏼🙂
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Zainab
31/10/2016 09:16:15 pm
I like the way you added AP SENTENCES add speech to improve.
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Umair
31/10/2016 12:07:43 pm
Dear diary,
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Miss Waldron
31/10/2016 07:35:05 pm
Well done Umair! 🙂
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Shazia
1/11/2016 09:04:46 am
First sentence is meant to be a few of us including me.
Aysha
31/10/2016 02:21:47 pm
Days have passed since I have seen light I have been in this dull prison cell for nearly 2 months now and I might not survive, I have not told the guards were the other men are. I might die.
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Miss Waldron
31/10/2016 07:35:40 pm
Better! More! More! 🙂
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Hamza
31/10/2016 02:24:48 pm
Dear diary,
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Miss Waldron
31/10/2016 07:36:17 pm
A good start Hamza!
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Zainab
31/10/2016 08:22:18 pm
He needs to add more and add speech and AP Sentences .
Zainab
31/10/2016 09:14:40 pm
Dear diary,
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Shazia
1/11/2016 08:55:36 am
The second sentence doesn't make sense it is meant to say it took me 5 full years.
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Naeemah
1/11/2016 08:53:13 am
Umair needs to out his speech marks in the right place. He also needs to make sure he uses his punctuation correctly. He needs to make sure that he spells his words correctly too.
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Zainab
1/11/2016 09:05:52 am
I agree Naemah .
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Safwara
1/11/2016 08:56:58 am
I lit the gunpowder... It all started when a group of guys came up to me and asked me ' are you good at putting on bonfires?' ' Yes yes Why?' We want to lit the House of Lords; King James is there and he is Protestant and we are Catholic. We need to destroy him and his entire family.' Why the entire family??' Because if we kill the whole family then there will be NO heirs to the throne. The day came, 5th of November, I lit the powder and got caught....
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Klaudia
1/11/2016 09:01:30 am
Dear diary
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Zainab
5/11/2016 10:08:37 am
Klaudia it is because he didn't like Catholics.
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Ebrahim
2/12/2016 12:00:17 pm
Wow! 71 comments! That's more than 6MP!😁👍
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Heena
3/1/2017 10:50:21 pm
Miss Waldron looks like your class are clever.Nice Diary entry every one.
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zakiyudeen
18/1/2017 05:19:05 pm
hi guys looks like this class could be better than my old class.Jokes!
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Heena
24/1/2017 05:52:26 pm
Spelling Zakiyudeen!!
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